tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6150006172410345177.post3187575885727057574..comments2023-08-24T08:39:28.960-04:00Comments on The (old) Write Mage: Revising My Query (There's a question way at the end.)Debra Renée Byrdhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08717966370332027353noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6150006172410345177.post-66637546189367795892014-06-24T08:41:06.497-04:002014-06-24T08:41:06.497-04:00Grammar short-cut: think of it more as "an AR...Grammar short-cut: think of it more as "an ARMY (of iron monsters) destroying everything in ITS path". The subject is singular, so the possessive is, too.<br /><br />Thanks! I was just focusing on the meat of the query, because the agent info will change. I'm curious about the Sleeping Beauty comparison, b/c I haven't seen the new movie yet. lol I really appreciate the time you Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6150006172410345177.post-28194667975458863222014-06-19T20:37:39.511-04:002014-06-19T20:37:39.511-04:00"an army of iron monsters destroying everythi..."an army of iron monsters destroying everything in its path" <br />I can't put my finger on why, but I feel like "its" is wrong. I think about it, and I can't come up with a reason. But I had to read it three times. I could just be in a lack-of-sleep haze.<br /><br />From the three query writing classes I've taken, I can tell you that the instructor would say this J Lenni Dornerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07961335286982498158noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6150006172410345177.post-63335692847120692982014-06-16T13:15:06.770-04:002014-06-16T13:15:06.770-04:00Thanks!Thanks!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6150006172410345177.post-3759530857404153872014-06-16T03:06:00.805-04:002014-06-16T03:06:00.805-04:00I've always found queries to be so, so hard to...I've always found queries to be so, so hard to write. They're very much the bane of my existence, too, haha. Very cool to see different versions of your query back-to-back like this. The latest one definitely seems clearer than the first, so I hope you get some good feedback on it! :)Heather R. Holdenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04309060285955963459noreply@blogger.com