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I'm Deborah. I'm a writer, currently seeking representation/publication for my YA Fantasy Fractured Princess

I love to play Final Fantasy games and Shattered Pixel Dungeon. I also enjoy the many ins and outs of music (I'm a chorus geek).

Tuesday, July 8, 2014

Express Yourself: Tuesday Words

Grr, I hate the lack of alliteration in that lol.


Welcome back to Express Yourself Weekly! This meme was created by Jackie @ Bouquet of Books and Dani @ Entertaining Interests to get to know their bloggers a little better each week. This week they want to know: In your WIP, what is the last line on Page 10 and the first line on Page 42 (or of the book you're currently reading if you're not a writer)?

Fortunately, I just emailed and saved my WIP to my work computer because we can't connect personal devices to our work computer.

(Whoops, let me take this out of reader mode...wow, Screen 10 is really Page 5!...And I'm guessing they would like a full sentence, so...) The last line of Page 10 of my WIP The Crystal Bearer  is:

The hull was made of blackwood, washed sand-white so the warm island colors and the sharp tribal shapes and flowers of his home stood out.

I can probably go ahead and cut some of those words and de-passivy this sentence. Live edit!

Sir Aleksandyr had whitewashed the blackwood so the warm island colors, flowers, and sharp tribal shapes of his homeland stood out.

Hurray!

And the first line on Page 42 is dialogue, but that's okay. lol

“That’ll do. Come with me, Ghuli.” She followed Brodie up a flight of stairs to the library.

See you tomorrow for Wednesday Words! :)

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